Grade 5 Fall — Multi-Paragraph Essay (5-Paragraph Format with Flexibility), Citations and Works Cited, and Audience-Aware Craft
English · WR G5 eng.g5.f.wr.revision_named_moves_g5

Apply 10 named revision moves to a G5 essay draft (MG-22)

Execute 10 named revision moves on an essay draft (MG-22), each labeled with green-pencil margin annotation: (1) STRONGER WORD CHOICE (Tier-2 Set 11 substitution); (2) ADD EXPLANATION (the E in TEEL); (3) CHECK LINK (each body ends with sentence connecting to thesis); (4) CHECK AUDIENCE (re-read with audience-analysis card); (5) ADD IN-TEXT CITATION; (6) CHECK VERB TENSE consistency; (7) ADD CORRELATIVE-CONJUNCTION PAIR; (8) EXPAND/COMBINE/REDUCE one sentence per paragraph; (9) CHECK COMMAS; (10) CHECK CONCLUSION SYNTHESIZES.

Mastery threshold
85%
Min instances
8
Typical minutes
50
Spaced intervals (days)
1, 3, 7, 14, 30, 60
Prereqs
Successors
Common misconceptions
  • Treats revision as 'making it longer' rather than applying named moves.
  • Applies same move repeatedly (e.g., word substitution) and skips the structural moves (check audience, check link).

Exercise pool (3)

Diff Stem Type
4 Apply remaining moves from MG-22 (Moves 7, 8, 9, 10) to your draft. Annotate each. remaining moves apply
4 Act on 5 suggestions from your peer-edit cycles 1 and 2. Annotate each in green-pencil margin: 'CYCLE 1 / MOVE X' or 'CYCLE 2 / MOVE Y'. act on peer suggestions
5 Apply 6 named revision moves (MG-22) to your full draft. Annotate each with green-pencil margin note ('MOVE 1' / 'MOVE 4' etc.).... six named moves revision