Apply 10 named revision moves to a G5 essay draft (MG-22)
Exercise Difficulty 5 ~20 min eng.g5.f.ex_31

Six Named Moves Revision

MG-22 Chart
Revision-moves anchor (G5-fall expansion of G4 revision routine): 10 named moves with margin-stamp annotations. 1. STRON

Revision-moves anchor (G5-fall expansion of G4 revision routine): 10 named moves with margin-stamp annotations. 1. STRONGER WORD CHOICE (Tier-2 Set 11 substitution); 2. ADD EXPLANATION (the E in TEEL — never let evidence stand alone); 3. CHECK LINK (each body paragraph ends with a sentence connecting back to thesis); 4. CHECK AUDIENCE (re-read with audience-analysis card in hand — does the tone fit?); 5. ADD IN-TEXT CITATION (every fact, quote, statistic with signal phrase OR parenthetical); 6. CHECK VERB TENSE (no inappropriate shifts within a paragraph); 7. ADD CORRELATIVE-CONJUNCTION PAIR (either/or, neither/nor, both/and, not only/but also for precision); 8. EXPAND, COMBINE, OR REDUCE one sentence per paragraph for stylistic variety; 9. CHECK COMMAS (introductory element, series, direct address, yes/no, tag question); 10. CHECK CONCLUSION SYNTHESIZES (not just summary). Print-ready 11x17.

Prompt

Apply 6 named revision moves (MG-22) to your full draft. Annotate each with green-pencil margin note ('MOVE 1' / 'MOVE 4' etc.). Different moves across different paragraphs.

How it's presented
mode revision on handwriting
Answer criteria
type rubric
criteria
  1. 6 different moves applied
  2. Each annotated
  3. Each in green pencil margin
  4. Variety across moves (not 6 of same)
Hints
  1. Variety matters — don't apply 6 word-substitutions.
  2. Move 4 (audience-check) is the signature G5 move.
Misconceptions to watch
  • Applies 6 of same move.
  • Forgets to annotate.