Pass 2 SENTENCE-LEVEL peer revision — sentence types, modifiers, concision; homographs

Homograph quick: read aloud. (1) 'The wind made the kite climb high.' (2) 'I wind the clock each night.' (3) 'She drew a tear from her eye.' (4) 'There was a tear in the page.' Same spelling, different meanings.

• Listen for pronunciation shift in pairs 1-2 and 3-4
• Note: context tells us which meaning
• Tee up homographs as a word-choice consideration

M-7-F-WR-17-B Chart

MG-23 anchor: 20 homograph pairs with pronunciation notes. Bear/bear, bow/bow, lead/lead, tear/tear, wind/wind, close/close, minute/minute, live/live, desert/desert, refuse/refuse, plus 10 more on reverse. Print-ready 11x17.

MG-23 Chart

Homograph deck anchor (CCSS L.7.5.b): 20-pair grid. Each cell shows the spelled-the-same word + two meanings + pronunciation note. Examples: BEAR (animal / to carry — same pronunciation). BOW (to bend / weapon — different pronunciations: /bau/ vs. /boh/). LEAD (metal /led/ / to guide /leed/). TEAR (to rip /tair/ / to cry /teer/). WIND (air movement /wind/ / to turn /waind/). CLOSE (near /klos/ / to shut /kloz/). MINUTE (time /min-it/ / tiny /my-noot/). LIVE (to be alive /liv/ / in real time /laiv/). DESERT (sandy land /DEZ-ert/ / to abandon /di-ZERT/). REFUSE (trash /REF-yoos/ / to decline /ri-FYOOZ/). 10 more on reverse. Bottom rule: 'Context tells you which meaning. When in doubt, read the sentence aloud.' Print-ready 11x17.

PASS 2 = SENTENCE-LEVEL. We are NOT looking at content claims or mechanics — only at sentence-level CRAFT. The 10 Pass-2 criteria (MG-28): four sentence types varied; no misplaced/dangling modifiers; coordinate adjectives marked correctly; wordiness audit applied (no obvious patterns); active voice default; signal phrases varied (not just 'X says'); interpretive sentences after quotes; parenthetical citations placed correctly; sentence rhythm varied; no sentence over 35 words without justification. Blue highlighter. Also today: HOMOGRAPHS (L.7.5.b). Same spelling, sometimes different pronunciation, always different meaning. 'Bear' (animal) vs. 'bear' (carry). 'Lead' (metal) vs. 'lead' (guide). 'Tear' (rip) vs. 'tear' (cry). Context decodes. Watch for homographs that change meaning in your draft.

• Variety is the point. Even good ideas in monotonous sentences read as flat.

  model Tally: 4 simple, 1 compound, 1 complex, 0 compound-complex. RECOMMEND: combine 2 simples into 1 compound-complex; vary opening structure. The reader hears uniformity as flatness.

  prompt Pass 2 audit: read partner's paragraph. Count sentence types. Is there variety?
• Research-writing modifier errors are common — flag in Pass 2.

  model Dangling modifier. STEP 1 modifier: 'Drawing on multiple sources.' STEP 2 actor: I (the researcher). STEP 3 repair: 'Drawing on multiple sources, I established credibility.' OR 'Drawing on multiple sources, the researcher established credibility.'

  prompt Pass 2 modifier check: 'Drawing on multiple sources, the credibility was established.' Apply 3-step repair.
• Reading aloud is the homograph-detection move.

  model Possibly — 'tear' could be the rip-meaning or the cry-meaning. Context here favors rip. If ambiguous, revise to 'rip' or 'tore.' Reading aloud helps catch homograph traps.

  prompt Homograph audit: '"The wind made the page tear," Nakate wrote.' Could the reader misread?

• Pair-share: name 3 Pass-2 criteria.
• Cold Call: what's different about Pass 2 from Pass 1?
• Thumbs: ready for Pass 2 (up) / need re-explanation (down)

M-7-F-WR-17-A Chart

MG-28 Pass 2 panel: 10 criteria (sentence types varied, no modifier errors, coordinate adjectives, wordiness audit, active voice, varied signal phrases, interpretive sentences, parentheticals placed, sentence rhythm, no over-35-word sentences). Blue color-coded. Print-ready 11x17.

MG-28 Chart Physical / non-image

3-pass peer-revision rubric adapted for research papers: 3-band stacked card extending G6 MG-16. PASS 1 — CONTENT (purple, 14 criteria adapted for research): research question focused / thesis answers the question / body paragraphs each make a sub-claim / minimum 3 sources cited overall / sources are credible per CRAAP / synthesis across sources visible in each body paragraph (not list-style) / counterpoint or limitation acknowledged / conclusion offers a so-what / introduction has hook + question + thesis + roadmap / paragraph order follows roadmap / each paragraph has a topic sentence and closing sentence / evidence supports claims / quotes are embedded with quote-sandwich pattern / paraphrases follow 3-rules. PASS 2 — SENTENCE-LEVEL (blue, 10 criteria adapted for research): four sentence types varied (at least one of each type used) / no misplaced or dangling modifiers / coordinate adjectives marked correctly / wordiness audit applied (no obvious wordiness patterns) / active voice default / signal phrases varied (not just 'X says') / interpretive sentences after quotes / parenthetical citations placed correctly / sentence rhythm varied / no sentence over 35 words without justification. PASS 3 — MECHANICS (green, 12 criteria adapted for research): MLA formatting correct (1-inch margins, double-spaced, header) / Works Cited alphabetical with hanging indent / each in-text citation matches a Works Cited entry / titles italicized or quoted correctly / spelling clean / capitalization clean / punctuation clean / pronoun case correct / pronoun consistency / semicolon/colon used correctly if used / commas for coordinate adjectives / quotation marks placed correctly. Bottom rule: 'ONE PASS AT A TIME.' Print-ready 11x17.

• PASS 2 conference: exchange drafts. Apply all 10 Pass-2 criteria with blue highlights. 22 minutes.

  scaffold MG-28 Pass 2 sheet; blue highlighter; MG-18 + MG-19 + MG-21 anchors at every desk
• Homograph audit pair-read: read your draft aloud to partner. Listen for any homograph that COULD be misread. Flag for revision.

  scaffold MG-23 homograph deck for reference

• From partner's Pass-2 feedback: name 1 sentence-type fix you will apply + 1 wordiness pattern you will audit.

• Restate: Pass 2 = sentence-level CRAFT only
• Preview: Pass 3 MECHANICS

• Apply Pass-2 revisions. Bring revised draft tomorrow.