Pass 3 MECHANICS peer revision — MLA formatting, citation precision, spelling, register

Connotation audit warm: in your draft, find one place where you used CLAIM, ASSERTION, or CONTENTION. Which did you choose and why?

• Listen for awareness vs. accident
• Note: G7 research register favors 'claim' (neutral) over 'assertion' (boldness) unless boldness is wanted
• Tee up: today is mechanics + register

PASS 3 = MECHANICS. We are NOT looking at content or sentences — only at MLA formatting, citation precision, spelling, capitalization, punctuation, and register. The 12 Pass-3 criteria (MG-28): MLA formatting (margins, double-spaced, header); Works Cited alphabetical with hanging indent; each in-text matches a Works Cited entry; titles italicized or quoted correctly; spelling clean; capitalization clean; punctuation clean; pronoun case correct (carry from G6); pronoun consistency; semicolon/colon used correctly if used; commas for coordinate adjectives; quotation marks placed correctly. Green highlighter. Also today: CONNOTATION in academic register (L.7.5.c). CLAIM (neutral, used most often) / ASSERTION (boldness without sufficient support) / CONTENTION (suggests dispute). INVESTIGATION (formal neutral) / INQUIRY (scholarly) / PROBE (aggressive). Research writers choose deliberately.

• Mismatched citations are common and signal the source was lost. Pass 3 catches this.

  model Read the body paper. Each parenthetical (e.g., '(Aveni 23)') — flip to Works Cited; find 'Aveni, Anthony F.' If matching entry exists, check off. If not, FLAG. Match cycle must be 100%.

  prompt Pass 3 check: every in-text citation matches a Works Cited entry. How do you verify?
• Connotation deliberation is a Pass-3 word-choice move.

  model Redundancy + connotation. 'Assertion' carries a connotation of unsupported boldness. Coates's argument IS well-supported. Better: 'Coates argues that historical injustice creates compounding harm.' Or 'Coates makes the case that...'

  prompt Connotation audit: 'Coates argues the assertion that historical injustice creates compounding harm.' Connotation issue?
• MLA formatting is the lowest-skill but highest-frequency error.

  model Check ruler in document. Check Format > Line Spacing > Double. Check header. Check title placement. All four = format clean. Any missing = flag.

  prompt MLA formatting check: are margins 1 inch? Double-spaced? Header with last name and page number? Title centered?

• Pair-share: name 3 Pass-3 criteria.
• Cold Call: how do you verify every in-text matches a Works Cited entry?
• Thumbs: ready for Pass 3 (up) / need re-explanation (down)

M-7-F-WR-18-A Chart

MG-28 Pass 3 panel: 12 criteria (MLA formatting, Works Cited, in-text matches, italics/quotes, spelling, capitalization, punctuation, pronouns, semicolon/colon, coordinate-adj commas, quotation marks). Green color-coded. Print-ready 11x17.

MG-28 Chart Physical / non-image

3-pass peer-revision rubric adapted for research papers: 3-band stacked card extending G6 MG-16. PASS 1 — CONTENT (purple, 14 criteria adapted for research): research question focused / thesis answers the question / body paragraphs each make a sub-claim / minimum 3 sources cited overall / sources are credible per CRAAP / synthesis across sources visible in each body paragraph (not list-style) / counterpoint or limitation acknowledged / conclusion offers a so-what / introduction has hook + question + thesis + roadmap / paragraph order follows roadmap / each paragraph has a topic sentence and closing sentence / evidence supports claims / quotes are embedded with quote-sandwich pattern / paraphrases follow 3-rules. PASS 2 — SENTENCE-LEVEL (blue, 10 criteria adapted for research): four sentence types varied (at least one of each type used) / no misplaced or dangling modifiers / coordinate adjectives marked correctly / wordiness audit applied (no obvious wordiness patterns) / active voice default / signal phrases varied (not just 'X says') / interpretive sentences after quotes / parenthetical citations placed correctly / sentence rhythm varied / no sentence over 35 words without justification. PASS 3 — MECHANICS (green, 12 criteria adapted for research): MLA formatting correct (1-inch margins, double-spaced, header) / Works Cited alphabetical with hanging indent / each in-text citation matches a Works Cited entry / titles italicized or quoted correctly / spelling clean / capitalization clean / punctuation clean / pronoun case correct / pronoun consistency / semicolon/colon used correctly if used / commas for coordinate adjectives / quotation marks placed correctly. Bottom rule: 'ONE PASS AT A TIME.' Print-ready 11x17.

M-7-F-WR-18-B Chart

MG-24 anchor: 3-row card showing similar-denotation words with different connotations (claim/assertion/contention; investigation/inquiry/probe; support/buttress/prop-up). Bottom rule: 'Connotation matters in research register.' Print-ready 11x17.

MG-24 Chart

Connotation in academic register anchor (CCSS L.7.5.c): 3-row card showing similar-denotation words with different connotations for research writing. ROW 1 — for a stated position: CLAIM (neutral — used most often in research) / ASSERTION (suggests boldness without sufficient support — use carefully) / CONTENTION (suggests dispute — for highlighting controversy). ROW 2 — for an investigation: INVESTIGATION (neutral, formal) / INQUIRY (neutral, scholarly) / PROBE (aggressive, journalistic — sometimes too strong). ROW 3 — for evidence-backing: SUPPORT (neutral) / BUTTRESS (formal, structural) / PROP UP (informal, weak — avoid in research). Bottom rule: 'Connotation matters in research register. Pick the word whose connotation matches your tone.' Worked examples for 3-4 more word groups. Print-ready 11x17.

• PASS 3 conference: exchange drafts. Apply all 12 Pass-3 criteria with green highlights. 22 minutes.

  scaffold MG-28 Pass 3 sheet; green highlighter; MG-10 + MG-11 + MG-24 at every desk
• Citation-match audit: physically draw lines from each in-text citation to its Works Cited entry. Any unmatched = flag.

  scaffold Citation-match worksheet (in-text column + Works Cited column)

• From partner's Pass-3 feedback: name 2 specific mechanics fixes you will apply (e.g., 'add hanging indent to Works Cited' / 'fix in-text citation on page 2').

• Restate: Pass 3 = mechanics + register only. All 3 passes done.
• Preview: Researcher's Forum prep

• Apply all Pass-3 revisions. Type FINAL published version of research paper. Bring next class.