Peer-Edit Cycle 2 and Acting on Suggested Moves

Children re-read their revised draft (post-cycle-1 + homework). Note 2 places where cycle-2 input could help.

• Provide silent reading time
• Affirm specific noticings

Today is peer-edit cycle 2 with a DIFFERENT partner. The structure is the same as cycle 1 but the focus shifts. Cycle 1 focused on STRUCTURAL feedback (TEEL bands, citation, audience). Cycle 2 should focus on STYLE feedback (word choice, sentence variety, link variation, synthesis). Same rubric, different lens. After peer-edit cycle 2, you have suggestions from TWO different readers. The next step: ACT ON at least 5 suggestions across cycles 1 and 2. Children who act on 5+ moves between cycles show measurable improvement. Watch teacher demonstrate acting on a peer suggestion. PEER NOTE: 'Body 2 LINK sentence is identical to body 1 LINK sentence — could vary?' WRITER ACTION: 'Re-read body 1 LINK: This is the first reason. Re-read body 2 LINK: This is the second reason. I will vary body 2 LINK to: Beyond pacing the sentences, this pause-creation is the second way verse form serves memoir.' WRITER MARK: green-pencil annotation 'CYCLE 2 / MOVE 3 — VARY LINK.'

• Acting on moves requires understanding WHY the peer noted them, not just fixing the surface. Re-read the named move in MG-22 before acting.

  model See narrative.

  prompt Teacher demonstrates acting on one peer note.

• What is the difference between cycle 1 and cycle 2 focus?
• How many moves should you act on across both cycles?

M-5-F-WR-20-A Chart

11x17 chart showing peer note in red on left, writer action in green on right. Annotation 'CYCLE 2 / MOVE 3 — VARY LINK' visible at margin. Print-ready, dyslexic-friendly font.

• Peer-edit with a NEW partner. Use MG-13 rubric focusing on STYLE feedback this time.

  scaffold MG-13 fresh sheet; peer-edit conversation card
• Act on at least 5 suggestions (from cycles 1 and 2 combined). Annotate each with green-pencil margin note.

  scaffold MG-22 revision-moves anchor; suggestions from peer-edit cycles in hand

M-5-F-WR-20-B Illustration

Reference image of a Grade-5 child's draft with green-pencil margin annotations showing 'CYCLE 1 — MOVE X' or 'CYCLE 2 — MOVE Y' notations throughout. Print-ready 8.5x11.

• Show your post-cycle-2 draft with 5+ acted-on moves annotated.
• Move status-tile to PUBLISH.

• Star the move that improved your draft most across both cycles.
• Predict: tomorrow we meet the LITERARY ESSAY stretch genre.

• At home tonight, read your final post-cycle-2 draft aloud. Bring to PUBLISH stage tomorrow.