Revision — 10 Named Moves on the Research Draft

Children share one move from the MG-18 anchor that interests them and predict where they'll apply it.

• Affirm specific moves chosen
• Note moves that are 'hot' this week (e.g., add SO-WHAT)
• Predict the move-stickers needed

Today you REVISE with named moves. The MG-18 anchor names 10 moves for research-mode revision: (1) STRONGER WORD CHOICE (Tier-2 Set 10 substitution); (2) ADD SO-WHAT after every evidence; (3) CHECK SOURCE CITATION (every fact has signal phrase); (4) CHECK PARAPHRASE-vs-QUOTE (≥1 each, distinguishable); (5) PRECISE WORD CHOICE (synonym gradient); (6) ADD A FIGURATIVE-LANGUAGE MOVE; (7) CHECK REGISTER (consistent formal); (8) CHECK PUNCTUATION FOR EFFECT; (9) ADD CATEGORY-LINK TRANSITION at paragraph opening; (10) CHECK WORKS-CITED LIST. Each move you apply gets a margin annotation in green pencil naming the move number ('MOVE 1 — STRONGER WORD' / 'MOVE 2 — ADD SO-WHAT' / 'MOVE 3 — CHECK CITATION' etc.). Target: ≥6 different moves visible on your draft. Watch teacher demo 4 moves on a sample paragraph: replace 'I think' with 'evidence suggests' (MOVE 1); add a so-what after the AAP statistic (MOVE 2); replace 'big' with 'devastating' (MOVE 5); add 'Across these categories' transition (MOVE 9).

• Notice each move is INTENTIONAL and named. Margin annotation makes the work visible.

  model BEFORE: 'I think Sojourner had a big effect on the country.' AFTER (MOVE 1 + MOVE 5): 'Evidence suggests Sojourner had a devastating effect on the country's understanding of slavery.' AFTER (MOVE 2 added): 'Evidence suggests Sojourner had a devastating effect on the country's understanding of slavery. This shift mattered because public attitudes shape political action.' AFTER (MOVE 9 transition added): 'Across these categories, evidence suggests Sojourner had a devastating effect on the country's understanding of slavery. This shift mattered because public attitudes shape political action.'

  prompt Teacher demos 4 revision moves on sample paragraph.

• What 3 moves are highest-leverage in your draft?
• Why is annotation in the margin required?

M-4-S-WR-16-A Chart Physical / non-image

Reproduction of MG-18 at 11x17: 10 numbered moves in a vertical list, each with icon and one-line description. Worked example column on right showing one move applied to a sample sentence (before/after). Print-ready, dyslexic-friendly font.

MG-18 Chart

Revision-moves anchor (Grade-4 spring research-mode expansion): 1. STRONGER WORD CHOICE (Tier-2 Set 10 substitution — 'I think' → 'I argue based on evidence'; 'big problem' → 'urgent issue'); 2. ADD SO-WHAT (after every evidence, add 1 sentence explaining why this matters); 3. CHECK SOURCE CITATION (every fact has a signal phrase); 4. CHECK PARAPHRASE-vs-QUOTE (mark each — at least one of each); 5. PRECISE WORD CHOICE (use synonym gradient — pick the exact word); 6. ADD A FIGURATIVE-LANGUAGE MOVE (simile, metaphor, personification, idiom, adage, or proverb where it fits); 7. CHECK REGISTER (consistent formal throughout); 8. CHECK PUNCTUATION FOR EFFECT; 9. ADD CATEGORY-LINK TRANSITION AT PARAGRAPH OPENING; 10. CHECK WORKS-CITED LIST (≥3 entries, alphabetized, format consistent). Print-ready 11x17.

• Apply ≥6 named moves to your draft. For each: pick the move, execute, annotate margin with green pencil naming the move number.

  scaffold MG-18 anchor; 10 move-stickers per child; green pencil; partner check
• Share with partner. Partner counts: how many different moves applied? Are they annotated?

  scaffold Move-counter card

M-4-S-WR-16-B Illustration

Reference image of a Grade-4 research draft with 7 green-pencil margin annotations naming move numbers ('MOVE 1 — STRONGER WORD' through 'MOVE 9 — CATEGORY-LINK TRANSITION'), each tied to a specific change in the body of the text. Print-ready 8.5x11.

• Count visible moves on your draft. Goal: ≥6 different moves annotated.
• Move status-tile to REVISE.

• Star your strongest revision move.

• Apply 2 more moves at home tonight. Annotate in green. Bring tomorrow for peer-edit prep.