Peer Edit — The Grade-3 6-Move Protocol

Watch the 90-second segment of MG-12 video showing all 6 moves applied. Children note the new move 5 (writer responds).

• Pause at move 5 and name it explicitly
• Bridge from G2's 5-move version

M-3-F-WR-20-A Video Physical / non-image

2.5-minute video clip (MG-12 reproduction). Two multicultural Grade-3 children at a small round table. Child A (writer) holds revised 4-paragraph narrative draft. Child B (peer editor) holds MG-13 bookmark. Clip shows all 6 moves with timestamped overlays: 0:00 LISTEN, 0:25 COMPLIMENT-WITH-QUOTE, 0:50 QUESTION, 1:15 SUGGESTION, 1:40 WRITER RESPONDS, 2:05 WRITER DECIDES. Move 5 is held visible for 25 seconds to emphasize the writer's out-loud thinking. Caption track on. Real-feel classroom; teacher in distance smiles. Print-ready production notes.

MG-12 Video Physical / non-image

2.5-minute peer-edit model of the 6-move protocol on a Grade-3 narrative draft: timestamped overlays at each move (0:00 LISTEN, 0:25 COMPLIMENT-WITH-QUOTE, 0:50 QUESTION, 1:15 SUGGESTION, 1:40 WRITER RESPONDS, 2:05 WRITER DECIDES). Real-feel classroom; both children visibly use the MG-13 bookmark.

MG-13 Chart

Peer-edit 6-move protocol bookmark (print-ready 2x7 inches): 1. LISTEN all the way through. 2. COMPLIMENT WITH A QUOTE. 3. ASK ONE QUESTION. 4. SUGGEST ONE NAMED REVISION MOVE (ADD SENSORY / STRONGER VERB / VARY LENGTH / COMBINE WITH SUBORDINATING CONJUNCTION / SHOW DON'T TELL / CHECK TENSE). 5. WRITER RESPONDS WITH THEIR THINKING. 6. WRITER DECIDES. Front color, back dyslexic-friendly B&W.

Last year you used a 5-move protocol. This year we add a SIXTH move — WRITER RESPONDS. Look at MG-13. Move 1: LISTEN all the way through before you say anything. Move 2: COMPLIMENT WITH A QUOTE. 'I liked when you wrote BABUSHKA WHISPERED, YOU CAN DO THIS because the dialogue tag whispered fits her tenderness.' Move 3: ASK ONE QUESTION. Genuine. 'What did you mean by THE STEAM TOUCHED MY FACE — was that physical or metaphor?' Move 4: SUGGEST ONE NAMED REVISION MOVE. From MG-15: ADD SENSORY / STRONGER VERB / COMBINE WITH SUBORDINATOR / VARY LENGTH / SHOW DON'T TELL / CHECK TENSE. 'You could try the COMBINE move on those two short sentences — use BECAUSE.' Move 5 (NEW): WRITER RESPONDS WITH THEIR THINKING. The writer says aloud what they're considering. 'I notice you're suggesting COMBINE. I'm thinking — if I combine, I lose the punch of the short sentence. Or I could try VARY LENGTH instead.' This makes the writer's metacognition visible. Move 6: WRITER DECIDES what to change. Peer editor never picks up the pencil. The writer is in charge.

• The new move 5 is the writer THINKING ALOUD. It's the most valuable move — it shows everyone what the writer is weighing.

  model AIDE (writer) reads draft aloud. TEACHER (peer editor) waits. Move 2: 'I liked when you wrote THE DOUGH SPLIT OPEN because split is a strong verb and open shows the result.' Move 3: 'What did you mean by THE COUNTERTOP FELT COLD — was Grandma cold too, or just you?' Move 4: 'You could try the COMBINE move on the two short sentences after — use WHEN.' Move 5 (writer responds): AIDE says, 'I notice you're suggesting COMBINE with WHEN. I'm thinking — those short sentences are doing a pacing job. If I combine, it speeds up. But maybe that's okay because we're at the peak.' Move 6 (writer decides): AIDE says, 'I'll try the combine. Save the original if I don't like it.'

  prompt Teacher and aide role-play the 6 moves on a sample draft.

• What's NEW about the 6-move version compared to G2's 5-move version?
• Who picks up the pencil — peer editor or writer?

M-3-F-WR-20-B Chart

Reproduction of MG-13 at 11x17: 6 numbered cards in a vertical strip. Each card has a 1-sentence move name + a tiny illustration: 1. LISTEN (ear icon). 2. COMPLIMENT WITH A QUOTE (speech bubble with quotation marks). 3. ASK A QUESTION (question mark icon). 4. SUGGEST A NAMED MOVE (revision-menu icon, with MG-15 6 moves listed below). 5. WRITER RESPONDS (thought-bubble icon — NEW for G3 spotlighted in yellow). 6. WRITER DECIDES (pencil in writer's hand icon). Bottom rule: 'PEER EDITOR DOES NOT PICK UP THE PENCIL.' Print-ready, dyslexic-friendly font.

MG-13 Chart

Peer-edit 6-move protocol bookmark (print-ready 2x7 inches): 1. LISTEN all the way through. 2. COMPLIMENT WITH A QUOTE. 3. ASK ONE QUESTION. 4. SUGGEST ONE NAMED REVISION MOVE (ADD SENSORY / STRONGER VERB / VARY LENGTH / COMBINE WITH SUBORDINATING CONJUNCTION / SHOW DON'T TELL / CHECK TENSE). 5. WRITER RESPONDS WITH THEIR THINKING. 6. WRITER DECIDES. Front color, back dyslexic-friendly B&W.

MG-15 Chart

Revision-moves anchor (Grade 3 menu, expanded from G2's 5 moves to 6): 1. ADD SENSORY DETAIL (eye, ear, nose, hand, tongue icons). 2. STRONGER VERB (Tier-2 Set 7 list inset: whispered, muttered, exclaimed, hesitated, hurried, paused, glanced, replied). 3. COMBINE WITH A SUBORDINATING CONJUNCTION (when, because, although, since, after, before, while, until, if). 4. VARY SENTENCE LENGTH (short stack icon). 5. SHOW DON'T TELL (replace 'I was scared' with 'My hands shook and I held my breath'). 6. CHECK TENSE (clock icon). Print-ready 11x17.

• Pair up. Run the 6-move protocol on your partner's first-narrative draft. Use MG-13 bookmark. Switch roles after 10 minutes. Audio-record optional for re-listening.

  scaffold MG-13 bookmark + timer + audio-record option + MG-15 revision-moves reference
• After both partners edit, the WRITER decides what to apply. Annotate with green pencil.

  scaffold Green pencil

• What COMPLIMENT-WITH-QUOTE did your partner give you?
• What did you SAY ALOUD during move 5 (writer responds)? What did you finally DECIDE in move 6?

• Thank your peer editor by name.
• Predict: tomorrow we publish the first narrative.

• At home, share your draft with a family member. Try the 6-move protocol in reverse — they edit, you respond out loud, you decide.