Revise an analytical essay through 3 peer-revision passes and 2 teacher writing conferences (CCSS W.7.5)
Exercise
Difficulty 4
~15 min
eng.g7.s.ex_33
Pass 2 Marking
Prompt
Apply the Pass 2 SENTENCE rubric to a sample essay draft (provided). Mark every weakness with blue highlight. Revise top 5 sentences.
Answer criteria
type
rubric
rubric
All 8 Pass 2 criteria applied + 5 sentences revised + revisions improve craft = mastery
Hints
- Read aloud — Pass 2 is most reliably diagnosed by ear.
- Opener variation is the most common Pass 2 weakness.
Misconceptions to watch
- Marks content weaknesses (Pass 1) instead of sentence-level.
- Revises only individual words instead of sentence structure.
Used in lessons