Choose precise, concise language — eliminate wordiness using the 7-pattern audit (CCSS L.7.3.a)
Exercise
Difficulty 4
~10 min
eng.g7.f.ex_28
Concision Revision
Prompt
Revise these 4 wordy sentences applying the 7-pattern audit. Label which pattern(s) you applied. (1) 'It is interesting to note that the Maya, who lived in the region of Mesoamerica, made the decision to develop sophisticated and complex calendars.' (2) 'There are many researchers who have come to the conclusion that the calendars were accurate.' (3) 'Due to the fact that the cycle was 584 days, the Maya tracked it.' (4) 'In the situation of the matter of the resolution of the issue.'
M-7-F-GR-EX-28-A
Interactive
Physical / non-image
Concision revision worksheet with 4 wordy sentences + revision lines + pattern-label column. Print-ready 8.5x11.
Answer criteria
type
rubric
rubric
4 revised with patterns labeled + 30%+ cut = 4; 4 revised without labels = 3; 2-3 revised = 2; <2 = 1
Hints
- Pattern 3 throat-clearers: 'It is interesting to note that' — CUT.
- Pattern 6 nominalizations: 'made the decision' → 'decided.'
Misconceptions to watch
- Cuts so aggressively that meaning is lost.
- Doesn't label patterns.
Used in lessons