Apply named revision moves to a persuasive draft (G4 fall expansion)
Exercise Difficulty 5 ~20 min eng.g4.f.ex_36

Five Move Revision Pass

MG-17 Chart
Revision-moves anchor (Grade-4 fall expansion from G3): 1. STRONGER WORD CHOICE (Tier-2 Set 9 substitution — 'I think' →

Revision-moves anchor (Grade-4 fall expansion from G3): 1. STRONGER WORD CHOICE (Tier-2 Set 9 substitution — 'I think' → 'I argue'; 'big problem' → 'urgent issue'). 2. ADD ELABORATION (after every evidence, add 1 sentence explaining WHY/HOW it supports the reason). 3. COMBINE WITH SUBORDINATING AND COORDINATING (produce one compound-complex sentence). 4. CHECK MODAL PRECISION (vary modals; match strength to claim). 5. ADD A RELATIVE CLAUSE (use who/whose/whom/which/that/where/when/why). 6. CHECK PROGRESSIVE-TENSE CONSISTENCY. 7. CHECK CONFUSED-WORDS (to/too/two, there/their/they're, your/you're, its/it's). 8. CHECK TITLE CAPITALIZATION. 9. ADD A LINK-BACK at the paragraph opening. Print-ready 11x17.

Prompt

Take your essay through 5 named revision moves from MG-17. For each move, annotate the change with a green-pencil margin note naming the move number (e.g., 'MOVE 2 — ELABORATE').

How it's presented
mode revision on handwriting
Answer criteria
type rubric
criteria
  1. 5 different moves applied
  2. Each annotated with move number
  3. Each annotation in green pencil margin
  4. All 5 visible across essay
Hints
  1. Pick the 5 moves that fit YOUR essay.
  2. Variety matters — don't apply the same move 5 times.
Misconceptions to watch
  • Applies one move 5 times.
  • Forgets to annotate.
Used in lessons