Apply the Grade-3 spring revision menu (7 named moves)
Exercise Difficulty 4 ~5 min eng.g3.s.ex_30

Expand Detail Revision

Prompt

Find one paragraph in your draft where the EXAMPLE is thin (just one short sentence). Expand it by adding a specific number, name, date, or sensory observation. Margin-annotate 'EXPAND DETAIL'.

How it's presented
mode revision on handwriting
Answer criteria
type rubric
criteria
  1. Thin example identified
  2. Specific element added (number / name / date / sense)
  3. Margin annotation applied
  4. Example becomes concrete
Hints
  1. Specific = a number, a name, a date, a sense.
  2. Don't just add more vague language — anchor it.
Misconceptions to watch
  • Expands with more vague language.
  • Adds an unrelated detail.