Revision integration, formal-style audit, and publishing preparation

Read your draft aloud. Note any tone shifts (formal/informal). Are they intentional?

• Listen for tone consistency
• Note: G6 default = formal; informal tone is choice
• Connect to G5-spring's voice/tone work

Two moves today. (1) INTEGRATION — apply peer's 2 priorities. Look for substance changes (claim sharpening, evidence depth, warrant quality, counterclaim fairness). Avoid surface-only changes. (2) FORMAL STYLE AUDIT (L.6.3.b). G6 argument default is FORMAL — no contractions, no slang, no chatty asides. Check: contractions (replace can't with cannot)? slang (replace 'kids' with 'students' or 'children')? Chatty asides (delete unless purposeful)? Check tone consistency throughout — your essay should sound like the same writer in paragraph 1 and paragraph 6. Then PUBLISH — typed final with works-cited list and counterclaim paragraph highlighted purple.

• Formal doesn't mean stiff — it means consistent register and precise word choice.

  model FORMAL: 'It is notable that students perform better with recess.' / 'Schools should not be dismissive about uniform debates.' / 'I will demonstrate this point.' (Or simply delete the chatty 'I'll tell you why' — let the argument speak.)

  prompt Replace these informal moves with formal: 'It's pretty cool that kids do better with recess.' 'Schools shouldn't be lame about uniforms.' 'I'll tell you why.'
• Mid-essay tone drift jars the reader.

  model MIXED — the first sentence is formal academic; the second is informal conversational. Choose one and revise throughout.

  prompt Check tone consistency: an essay that goes from 'It is well established that ___' to 'And like, basically, the schools are wrong, so ___'

• Audit your draft: 3 contractions to expand?
• Tone-check: is your draft consistently formal? If not, where does it drift?

• Integrate partner's 2 priorities into final revision.

  scaffold MG-21 rubric; revision pencil; partner feedback form
• Run the formal-style audit. Expand contractions; replace slang; check tone consistency.

  scaffold Formal/informal checklist; contraction reference card
• Type final draft. Format works-cited at end. Highlight counterclaim paragraph purple.

  scaffold Keyboarding station; MG-30 bibliographic info for works-cited; color-print or highlighter

M-6-F-WR-19-B Chart

Print-ready 8.5x11 sample formatted final draft. Margins (1 inch), font (12pt Times or sans-serif), spacing (1.5 or double), title centered, paragraphs indented, counterclaim paragraph highlighted purple, works-cited list at bottom with 6 bibliographic fields per entry per MG-30. Dyslexic-friendly font.

MG-30 Chart

Bibliographic-information capture card (W.6.8): a 6-field form per source. FIELD 1 — AUTHOR (last name, first name). FIELD 2 — TITLE (italicized for books; "in quotes" for articles). FIELD 3 — PUBLISHER or website name. FIELD 4 — YEAR of publication. FIELD 5 — URL (for digital) or PAGES (for print). FIELD 6 — DATE ACCESSED (for digital sources). Bottom: 'This is basic bibliographic information per CCSS W.6.8. Full MLA/APA style is reserved for G7-G8. At G6: get the 6 fields right.' Worked examples for a book, a news article, and a website. Print-ready 8.5x11 single-sided.

• Share your revised counterclaim paragraph with elbow partner.
• Identify 1 formal-style fix you made.

• Restate: G6 argument default is ___ style
• Preview tomorrow's oral-rehearsal for Argument Forum

• Read your typed final draft aloud. Make any final fixes. Practice oral delivery — 60 seconds opening for tomorrow.