Workshop revision — add an adjective to enrich a sentence

Adjective bank brainstorm: project the class adjective bank — children call out adjectives that match a noun.

• Pick a noun ('dog')
• Brainstorm 10 adjectives

Revise = make better. Today's strategy: add ADJECTIVES to enrich your sentences. Watch — 'The dog ran.' (3 words.) Revise: 'The big brown dog ran fast.' (6 words.) See how much MORE the reader knows? Real authors use sensory detail: how does it LOOK, SOUND, FEEL?

• Two adjectives added — color, texture.

  model 'The fluffy orange cat sat on the warm yellow mat.'

  prompt Revise: 'The cat sat on the mat.'
• Adjective + verb upgrade + setting detail.

  model 'I sprinted to school on a frosty Monday morning.'

  prompt Revise: 'I ran to school.'

• What's an adjective?
• Add an adjective to: 'the apple.'
• Why do authors add details?

M-1-F-WR-17-A Chart

Wall chart 'Our Adjective Bank' organized by sense: SIGHT (red, fluffy, tiny, gigantic, sparkling), SOUND (loud, soft, whispering, booming), TOUCH (smooth, rough, sticky, cold), TASTE (sweet, sour, salty, spicy), SMELL (fragrant, smoky, fresh, stinky), FEELING (happy, brave, sad, curious). Children add new adjectives throughout the year.

• Pick one sentence in your narrative draft. Revise it with three adjectives.

  scaffold Adjective bank.
• Apply to two more sentences.

  scaffold Sensory chart visible.
• Peer share: read original vs. revised sentence pair to partner.

  scaffold Compliment + wonder.

M-1-F-WR-17-B Chart

Two-panel chart 'Revise to Add Detail'. Left BEFORE: 'The dog ran.' (small text, gray). Right AFTER: 'The big fluffy brown dog sprinted across the green grass.' (larger text, colorful, with arrows pointing to each added adjective: big, fluffy, brown, sprinted (verb upgrade), green). Caption: 'More detail = more interesting!'

• Show one original sentence and one revised version with ≥3 adjectives.
• Self-check: did the revision make my writing more interesting?

• Three children share original vs. revised
• Class applauds revision growth

• Read your revised piece to a family member. Notice their reaction.